<?xml version='1.0' encoding='UTF-8'?><?xml-stylesheet href="http://www.blogger.com/styles/atom.css" type="text/css"?><feed xmlns='http://www.w3.org/2005/Atom' xmlns:openSearch='http://a9.com/-/spec/opensearchrss/1.0/' xmlns:georss='http://www.georss.org/georss'><id>tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8649745971845838517</id><updated>2009-11-05T17:10:35.053-05:00</updated><title type='text'>Jon's Song Tips</title><subtitle type='html'></subtitle><link rel='http://schemas.google.com/g/2005#feed' type='application/atom+xml' href='http://jonssongtips.blogspot.com/feeds/posts/default'/><link rel='self' type='application/atom+xml' href='http://www.blogger.com/feeds/8649745971845838517/posts/default'/><link rel='alternate' type='text/html' href='http://jonssongtips.blogspot.com/'/><link rel='hub' href='http://pubsubhubbub.appspot.com/'/><author><name>tammyg</name><email>noreply@blogger.com</email></author><generator version='7.00' uri='http://www.blogger.com'>Blogger</generator><openSearch:totalResults>7</openSearch:totalResults><openSearch:startIndex>1</openSearch:startIndex><openSearch:itemsPerPage>25</openSearch:itemsPerPage><entry><id>tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8649745971845838517.post-1072888188516459059</id><published>2008-08-10T11:30:00.003-04:00</published><updated>2008-08-10T11:40:53.843-04:00</updated><title type='text'>Be clear as to the setting of your song.</title><content type='html'>&lt;span style="font-style:italic;"&gt;"In a bar in Toledo, across from the depot"&lt;/span&gt; tells you not only where you are but also suggests the décor. (From&lt;span style="font-style:italic;"&gt; “You Picked a Fine Time to Leave Me, Lucile”&lt;/span&gt;)&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;Toledo is not stylish New York, romantic Paris or trendy Los Angeles; it identifies with lower-middle class working people, or even lower-class than that.  Across from the depot tells you that it is in a dirty, commercial district; there is diesel smoke in the air and the smell of oil. You don't want to be there if you don't have a choice. &lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;Here's another, from &lt;span style="font-style:italic;"&gt;“The Night the Lights went out on Georgia”&lt;/span&gt;:&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;span style="font-style:italic;"&gt;“He was on his way home from Candletop &lt;/span&gt;(a mountain location), &lt;br /&gt; &lt;span style="font-style:italic;"&gt;been two weeks gone and  thought he'd stop&lt;br /&gt; at Williams and have him a drink 'fore he went home to her.” &lt;br /&gt;&lt;/span&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;This one not only sets the location but also hints at the story.  This guy's gone two weeks and before he goes home to “Her”, he has to stop at the bar for a drink.  All is not well in their relationship, clearly, and the opening line sets you up for it.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;Your song is a three-minute movie.  The open line is the opening scene. It tells people what they are in for, gives them the scenery and the feel for the story or the concept of the song.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;span style="font-style:italic;"&gt;“We lost the farm when I was nine.&lt;br /&gt; The house and barn went up in flame.&lt;br /&gt; Lightning struck a power line,&lt;br /&gt; So there was no one you could blame.”&lt;br /&gt;&lt;/span&gt;&lt;br /&gt;This song describes a rural setting: a farm, possibly 20 to 40 years ago. The farm is far enough from town that the power line has to run to the house, open to being hit by lightning and the fire truck will not be coming to put it out.  You know where you are with an opening like that.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;Let's take a look at a few recent songs by famous people:&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;span style="font-weight:bold;"&gt;Brad Paisley - Online&lt;br /&gt;&lt;/span&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;span style="font-style:italic;"&gt;I work down at the pizza pit&lt;br /&gt;And I drive an old Hyundai&lt;br /&gt;I still live with my mom and dad&lt;br /&gt;I'm 5'3 and overweight&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;I'm a Sci-Fi fanatic&lt;br /&gt;Mild asthmatic&lt;br /&gt;Never been to 2nd base&lt;br /&gt;But there's a whole 'nother me&lt;br /&gt;That you need to see&lt;br /&gt;Go check out MySpace&lt;br /&gt;&lt;/span&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;Brad paints us a clear picture of a loser, driving an old Korean car, delivering pizzas for a place we haven't heard of, living with mom and dad “still” and stereotypically weird. &lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;span style="font-weight:bold;"&gt;Montgomery Gentry - Back When I Knew It All &lt;/span&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;span style="font-style:italic;"&gt;At the ripe old age of nineteen &lt;br /&gt; I bought a short bed pick up chicks machine &lt;br /&gt; life ran on beer and gasoline &lt;br /&gt; a half a lap ahead of the law  &lt;br /&gt;I had a fake ID that got me into "tuffies" &lt;br /&gt; love was a word I used to get lucky &lt;br /&gt; was a big time spender with that plastic money &lt;br /&gt; back when I knew it all &lt;/span&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;This opening reeks of small-towns, sketching in the typical nineteen-year-old with a pickup and a beer in his hand. The picture makes us smile, especially when he gets to “Back when I knew it all.”  &lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;span style="font-weight:bold;"&gt;Dierks Bentley - Trying To Stop Your Leaving &lt;/span&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;span style="font-style:italic;"&gt;Got a guitar &lt;br /&gt;Got a guitar on my back&lt;br /&gt; And I'm standin' on this lonesome railroad track &lt;br /&gt;Train's a comin' &lt;br /&gt;It'll be here 'fore too long&lt;br /&gt; But I don't think I can stop it with a song&lt;br /&gt; Girl that's the kind of way I'm feelin' &lt;br /&gt;Tryin' to stop your leavin' &lt;/span&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;The picture of the lone picker, guitar on his back, who's “gotta ramble” is so etched into our musical consciousness that it only takes a few words to bring it into focus.  “Guitar on back” “Lonesome railroad track” “Tryin' to stop your leavin'”  If you strain a little, you can hear a “lonesome whistle blow” and feel the “early mornin' rain”.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;span style="font-weight:bold;"&gt;Alan Jackson - Good Time&lt;/span&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;span style="font-style:italic;"&gt;Work, work all week long&lt;br /&gt; Punchin’ that clock from dusk till dawn. &lt;br /&gt;Countin’ the days till Friday night&lt;br /&gt; That’s when all the conditions are right.&lt;br /&gt; For a good time&lt;br /&gt; I need a good time. &lt;/span&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;Dub in your own work place, wherever you have seen a clock to punch, and you will find people “countin' the days till Friday night.”  All of them need a good time, but he opens by giving us the scene from which we want to escape.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;span style="font-weight:bold;"&gt;Toby Keith - She's a Hottie&lt;/span&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;span style="font-style:italic;"&gt;She's sittin' by the water where the river gets wide, &lt;br /&gt; think about swimming to the other side, &lt;br /&gt; Got a "Marlboro" Red, and a can of cold "Bud"&lt;br /&gt; toes squished down in the Arkansas mud&lt;/span&gt; &lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;You can picture this scene, also the economic status of those involved and the attitude with which they approach life.  She would never think to smoke anything but Marlboro Red or drink anything but cold “Bud.”  If you put her in Trader Joe's buying “Two Buck Chuck” she would be a different person.  Put her at Starbucks getting a double decaf soy latte with extra foam, and you have a totally different person.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;span style="font-weight:bold;"&gt;Tim McGraw - Kristofferson&lt;/span&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;span style="font-style:italic;"&gt;I just walked in and you were gone &lt;br /&gt;To your Mama's I suppose&lt;br /&gt; It looks like you won't be back so I thought you ought to know&lt;br /&gt; I found that note you left today it only took you half a page&lt;br /&gt; I'm gonna grab my old guitar take a pencil from the jar and fill in the empty space &lt;/span&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;That it is a man singing, saying “you were gone” followed by “to your Mama's” instantly paints a picture of a smallish house or apartment with the closet open and hangers dangling empty on the bar.  That she left a not just confirms your worst fears. &lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;span style="font-weight:bold;"&gt;Keith Anderson - I Still Miss You&lt;br /&gt;&lt;/span&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;span style="font-style:italic;"&gt;I've changed the presets in my truck &lt;br /&gt;so those old songs don't sneak up &lt;br /&gt;they still find me and remind me &lt;br /&gt;yeah you come back that easy&lt;br /&gt; try restaurants I've never been to &lt;br /&gt;order new things off the menu &lt;br /&gt;that I never tried cause you didn't like &lt;/span&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;He says “truck” in the first line.  Not my “car,” not my “vehicle” and not even “on my radio,” but “in my truck.”  Next, he tries new restaurants. Clearly they were not living together.  So, he eats in restaurants, drives a truck and is trying to forget someone.  A good start.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;You see, the opening lines tell the listener where he is and what is happening.  He knows his surroundings by the end of the first verse and so can make sense of the chorus.  If you don't let the listener know where he is, other lines may not make sense.  If it doesn't make sense, he doesn't understand it and tries to figure it out.  By the time he gives up trying to figure it out, you have sung another verse and chorus and the song is almost over.  He gives up listening and goes back to the conversation he had started.  That's when the “chat level” goes up in the place where you are playing.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;So instead of saying,  &lt;br /&gt;&lt;span style="font-style:italic;"&gt;“She picked a lousy place to decide&lt;br /&gt; that she didn't want to be married anymore.”&lt;br /&gt;&lt;/span&gt;&lt;br /&gt;Try saying instead:&lt;br /&gt;&lt;span style="font-style:italic;"&gt;“At a bar in Toledo, across from the depot,&lt;br /&gt; On a barstool, she took off her ring.”&lt;br /&gt;&lt;/span&gt;&lt;br /&gt;Tell the audience where they are and you will write hits.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;span style="font-style:italic;"&gt;Jon Batson&lt;br /&gt;www.jonbatson.com&lt;br /&gt;Author of The Songwriter's Hook Book at www.cdbaby.com/jonbatson3.&lt;/span&gt;&lt;div class="blogger-post-footer"&gt;&lt;img width='1' height='1' src='https://blogger.googleusercontent.com/tracker/8649745971845838517-1072888188516459059?l=jonssongtips.blogspot.com'/&gt;&lt;/div&gt;</content><link rel='replies' type='application/atom+xml' href='http://jonssongtips.blogspot.com/feeds/1072888188516459059/comments/default' title='Post Comments'/><link rel='replies' type='text/html' href='https://www.blogger.com/comment.g?blogID=8649745971845838517&amp;postID=1072888188516459059' title='0 Comments'/><link rel='edit' type='application/atom+xml' href='http://www.blogger.com/feeds/8649745971845838517/posts/default/1072888188516459059'/><link rel='self' type='application/atom+xml' href='http://www.blogger.com/feeds/8649745971845838517/posts/default/1072888188516459059'/><link rel='alternate' type='text/html' href='http://jonssongtips.blogspot.com/2008/08/be-clear-as-to-setting-of-your-song.html' title='Be clear as to the setting of your song.'/><author><name>tammyg</name><email>noreply@blogger.com</email><gd:extendedProperty xmlns:gd='http://schemas.google.com/g/2005' name='OpenSocialUserId' value='15686532354341681873'/></author><thr:total xmlns:thr='http://purl.org/syndication/thread/1.0'>0</thr:total></entry><entry><id>tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8649745971845838517.post-7888484082048382644</id><published>2008-05-01T21:01:00.003-04:00</published><updated>2008-05-01T21:07:22.397-04:00</updated><title type='text'>Make a List.</title><content type='html'>Not all the rhymes are in the rhyming dictionary.  You will want to make a list of other rhymes not usually used.   For example: All and Lauren Bacall, Buddies and Fuddy-Duddies.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;Not all rhymes are spelled the same.  Eyes and Size, for example.  When using the “ize” rhyme, words with a 'y' ending in the plural will work, such as Size and Flies, or Cries, or Spies.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;Conversely, not all words spelled the same sound the same.  Rain and Again do not rhyme in the proper sense.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;Beware of words that are spelled differently, but sound the same.  Size and Sighs are different words, but sound the same and can be confusing to the listener.  They are not a rhyme, they are the same sound.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;The trick is to hear how the word sounds and how it will sound to the listener.  If you are writing in a dialect, accent or slang, the rhymes will be different according to the ethnic of the song you are writing.  In the song “Makin' Whoopee,” there's a line, “They think they're hidden, who are they kiddin'” using a slang phrase and rhyming the accepted street usage, “kiddin'” with “hidden.”&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;Make a list of rhymes that would have to do with the subject or title of the song, especially if it is a particular subject.  If the title or theme of the song is particular, you will need particular items in the song to give it that flavor.  (Caution: this can be overdone.  If you want comic effect, OK, but if you don't, it can be bad.) &lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;Making a list of associated words is called “laundry list” writing.  In a song called “Shot Full of Love,” the songwriter's list included: Bullet, gun, '45, '38, explode, trigger, smoking gun, bang, pow, zap, mortally wounded and quick-on-the-draw.  All things associated with guns or being shot, and all will be related to love somehow.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;If you are writing a Country, there is a trend towards near rhyme or imperfect rhyme; if it sounds close, it'll work.  This opens up a myriad of possibilities to the songwriter who finds himself limited by perfect rhyme.  &lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;“There's a junk-yard dog a-barkin' in the valley down below.&lt;br /&gt; He's wantin' me to stop an' gather up a heavy load.”  (from A Ways to Go)&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;Of course, if you cannot rhyme a word you simply must have in the song, put it in the middle of a line or in a line that need not rhyme.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;Internal rhyme can add color to a song and give you some interesting phrases.  The word Fun or Sun in the middle of a line and Wonderful in the next line give you internal rhyme to pull your song together.  &lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;“Them windshield wipers clappin' time, and holding Bobbie's hand in mine, we sang ev'ry song that driver knew.”  (From Bobbie McGee)&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;Or one of my favorites: “At a bar in Toledo, across from the depot, on a barstool she took off her ring.” (From Lucile)&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;All that said, there is much argument for a rhyming dictionary; I have seven at my desk.  Looking over a list of rhymes can take you places in a song that you weren't originally intending to go.  You could see a word and it will open up a whole new angle to your song.  From a rhyming dictionary, I wrote:&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;“She was only a passing fiancé, the wedding went off without a hitch.&lt;br /&gt; One of us jilted the other, but I could not, for the life of me, say which.&lt;br /&gt; Just an afternoon's diversion, one of life's lessons to learn,&lt;br /&gt; A round-trip, tourist-class excursion into the land of no return.”&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;So keep that rhyming dictionary handy, or see www.rhymezone.com, but don't let your imagination end there.  You're the writer, write something unique.  Remember, if it was easy, anybody could do it.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;span style="font-style:italic;"&gt;Jon Batson&lt;br /&gt;www.jonbatson.com&lt;br /&gt;Author of The Songwriter's Hook Book at www.cdbaby.com/jonbatson3.&lt;/span&gt;&lt;div class="blogger-post-footer"&gt;&lt;img width='1' height='1' src='https://blogger.googleusercontent.com/tracker/8649745971845838517-7888484082048382644?l=jonssongtips.blogspot.com'/&gt;&lt;/div&gt;</content><link rel='replies' type='application/atom+xml' href='http://jonssongtips.blogspot.com/feeds/7888484082048382644/comments/default' title='Post Comments'/><link rel='replies' type='text/html' href='https://www.blogger.com/comment.g?blogID=8649745971845838517&amp;postID=7888484082048382644' title='2 Comments'/><link rel='edit' type='application/atom+xml' href='http://www.blogger.com/feeds/8649745971845838517/posts/default/7888484082048382644'/><link rel='self' type='application/atom+xml' href='http://www.blogger.com/feeds/8649745971845838517/posts/default/7888484082048382644'/><link rel='alternate' type='text/html' href='http://jonssongtips.blogspot.com/2008/05/make-list.html' title='Make a List.'/><author><name>tammyg</name><email>noreply@blogger.com</email><gd:extendedProperty xmlns:gd='http://schemas.google.com/g/2005' name='OpenSocialUserId' value='15686532354341681873'/></author><thr:total xmlns:thr='http://purl.org/syndication/thread/1.0'>2</thr:total></entry><entry><id>tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8649745971845838517.post-6228540767563767077</id><published>2008-04-10T12:57:00.000-04:00</published><updated>2008-04-10T13:01:01.947-04:00</updated><title type='text'>Write it backwards.</title><content type='html'>Put an unusual rhyme second &amp; the word found to rhyme with it first.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;In my song, &lt;span style="font-style:italic;"&gt;Ol' Bum Toe&lt;/span&gt; -- not an unusual song -- I have this as a second verse.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;span style="font-style:italic;"&gt;I can tell there's a change in the weather&lt;br /&gt;In this Ol' Bum Toe of mine&lt;br /&gt;When I'm torn twixt a one and a t'other&lt;br /&gt;This toe gives me a sign&lt;br /&gt;And when it gets to screamin' like a special edition&lt;br /&gt;Tellin' me which way to go&lt;br /&gt;There's a whole lot of people I'm wishin'&lt;br /&gt;Were as smart as my bum toe.&lt;/span&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;I wanted to write &lt;span style="font-style:italic;"&gt;There's a whole lot of people I'm wishin' were as smart as my bum toe.&lt;/span&gt; I thought it was clever and cute. But that left me with a hard rhyme -- "wishin'." I started looking at variations on a rhyme and came up with "edition" -- I remembered the newsboys yelling on the corners "Special Edition!" and I had my rhyme. It also gave me another way to go on the idea that my toe give me the news - it's screamin' like a special edition.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;Bob Dylan did it, often.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;span style="font-style:italic;"&gt;You must leave now, take what you need, you think will last&lt;br /&gt;But whatever you wish to keep, you better grab it fast&lt;/span&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;The idea that you must grab it fast if you wish to keep it is stronger than what you need that you think will last. So he uses the weaker line first and the stronger line, the more logical rhyme, second. Whether he did it intentionally or automatically is not the point, if he had done it enough in the past, it would have been second nature.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;And later in the same song,&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;span style="font-style:italic;"&gt;The highway is for gamblers, better use your sense&lt;br /&gt;Take what you have gathered from coincidence&lt;/span&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;span style="font-style:italic;"&gt;Coincidence&lt;/span&gt; is a toughie to rhyme, tougher than "see" or "you," so he takes you to a simple rhyme first -- use your sense. You think, "oh, how clever, to have thought of such a complex rhyme for sense." But it wasn't really, he worked backwards.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;It's not just the hard rhymes, sometimes easy rhymes can be written the same way. In &lt;span style="font-style:italic;"&gt;Goodbye Jackson&lt;/span&gt;, I wrote,&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;span style="font-style:italic;"&gt;Old enough for rambling, like my daddy done.&lt;br /&gt;He was just a hobo. Iím a hobo's son.&lt;br /&gt;I was only seven when I saw him go&lt;br /&gt;Down to the Jackson train yard and out on the B&amp;O&lt;br /&gt;If that midnight train that's passin',&lt;br /&gt;Is the one that took my daddy, Goodbye, Jackson&lt;/span&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;I liked the idea of using the name of a railroad, like it seemed to me that someone "riding the rails" would say it: he went out on the B&amp;O.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;So I wrote my line &lt;span style="font-style:italic;"&gt;Down to the Jackson train yard and out on the B&amp;O&lt;/span&gt; and then I wrote the line before it, &lt;span style="font-style:italic;"&gt;I was only seven when I saw him go.&lt;/span&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;Most of this song was written the same way, I took the line I wanted and wrote the first line to rhyme with that,&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;span style="font-style:italic;"&gt;Never had much schoolin', never had the time.&lt;br /&gt;Never paid the taxman, never made a dime.&lt;/span&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;And the same with,&lt;br /&gt;&lt;span style="font-style:italic;"&gt;&lt;br /&gt;Count the country's cross-ties, takin' whatever comes.&lt;br /&gt;Learn me a diffírent language, the slang of the railroad bums.&lt;/span&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;One way to handle that would be to write the key words you want, such as "never made a dime" and "railroad bums" in a hobo song, and then write the rhymes for them, work them in so the second rhyme comes first.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;People will begin calling you clever.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;span style="font-style:italic;"&gt;&lt;br /&gt;Jon Batson&lt;br /&gt;www.jonbatson.com&lt;br /&gt;Author of The Songwriter's Hook Book at www.cdbaby.com/jonbatson3.&lt;/span&gt;&lt;div class="blogger-post-footer"&gt;&lt;img width='1' height='1' src='https://blogger.googleusercontent.com/tracker/8649745971845838517-6228540767563767077?l=jonssongtips.blogspot.com'/&gt;&lt;/div&gt;</content><link rel='replies' type='application/atom+xml' href='http://jonssongtips.blogspot.com/feeds/6228540767563767077/comments/default' title='Post Comments'/><link rel='replies' type='text/html' href='https://www.blogger.com/comment.g?blogID=8649745971845838517&amp;postID=6228540767563767077' title='0 Comments'/><link rel='edit' type='application/atom+xml' href='http://www.blogger.com/feeds/8649745971845838517/posts/default/6228540767563767077'/><link rel='self' type='application/atom+xml' href='http://www.blogger.com/feeds/8649745971845838517/posts/default/6228540767563767077'/><link rel='alternate' type='text/html' href='http://jonssongtips.blogspot.com/2008/04/write-it-backwards.html' title='Write it backwards.'/><author><name>tammyg</name><email>noreply@blogger.com</email><gd:extendedProperty xmlns:gd='http://schemas.google.com/g/2005' name='OpenSocialUserId' value='15686532354341681873'/></author><thr:total xmlns:thr='http://purl.org/syndication/thread/1.0'>0</thr:total></entry><entry><id>tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8649745971845838517.post-6966265540076875284</id><published>2008-04-10T12:52:00.000-04:00</published><updated>2008-04-10T12:56:56.265-04:00</updated><title type='text'>Leaving reality behind.</title><content type='html'>Making your true-to-life song their true-life song.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;Your significant other from Poughkeepsie dumped you for a dog-walker and they both left in a Toyota for Atlantic City. You are of course heartbroken, but glad for a good excuse to write a song. You have a bad week or two, but you donít swear off of relationships forever. Instead you start making a list of prospective replacements. You do, however, swear off that type.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;Sound like a real gripper of a plot? Not really, but it is a slice of life, which usually makes for bad songwriting. Sorry, all you citizens of Poughkeepsie, unless the song is a comedy, your version will never be heard.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;If you really want the audience to be sympathetic of your plight and admiring of your newly-acquired will to go on, you must wrap it in a nice sounding package. You must, in short, step away from the truth and weave your story into more acceptable fiction.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;Think for a moment; how many names did "Lucille" have before she picked a fine time to leave him? How many towns did the guy get to by the time he got to Phoenix? Did Green Day live on a Street of Broken Promises or a Road of Busted Plans before they sang about a Boulevard of Broken Dreams?&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;"Gypsies, Tramps and Thieves" started life as "Gypsies, White-Trash and Thieves." Why the change? It sounded better.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;Trying to rhyme &lt;span style="font-style:italic;"&gt;Halifax&lt;/span&gt; may not be as easy as rhyming &lt;span style="font-style:italic;"&gt;Tallahassee&lt;/span&gt;, so unless you are singing about a crab fisherman, change the locale.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;Finding a voice for a lost school chum who moved to the other coast might not be punchy enough. Change the gender to meet the &lt;span style="font-style:italic;"&gt;lost love&lt;/span&gt; type of song and cry your heart out.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;When your first love dumped you, didn't you slightly alter the story to make yourself more sympathetic to your friends? Yes you did, even if you said you didn't. Well, do that for your song.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;There is an old rule:  We don't care about your life -- we care about our lives. We want to be moved.  Write songs that move others -- not all about you.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;Let's go to a well-known chorus, at least to me.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;span style="font-style:italic;"&gt;Wasting away again in Margaritaville&lt;br /&gt;Searching for my lost shaker of salt&lt;br /&gt;Some people claim that it's a woman to blame&lt;br /&gt;But I think that it's nobody's fault*&lt;/span&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;Now, I don't know, but let's just pretend that Jimmy Buffet was in Rosarita Beach having a grand old time, a little hung-over and couldn't find his left shoe. Let's say that he was not shunting responsibility for his fate off on Nobody (later to be taken on by himself in a brilliant turn of chorus-making art). Let's say that the only woman involved with his vacation was the one he was trying to pick up in the lounge who wasn't going for it. Let's just assume all that is the case for a moment. Would that have made as good a song?&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;span style="font-style:italic;"&gt;A little hung-over in Rosarita Beach&lt;br /&gt;Looking for my left shoe&lt;br /&gt;The only girl I see wants no part of me&lt;br /&gt;And I guess it just could be my breath&lt;/span&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;You see? It's just not as punchy. It's dull and boringly true. What to do?&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;So he made up a name of a place that could be anywhere that tequila drinks are served and says he's wasting away there. He can't find his shaker of salt -- indispensable to such a lifestyle. He hints that people are talking about him, no doubt behind his back and in disparaging tones and intimating that there's a woman to blame. Of course, he just shrugs and says no one is to blame, later saying it just could be his fault and still later, that it's his own damn fault. By golly, he even makes it sound rogue-ish enough to make us want to go down there and be wasting away as well.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;So, if the story you wrote does not move others, change it. If it didn't happen exactly that way, so what! I don't know that. I will buy whatever you tell me. Tell me in a colorful enough way and I will help to make it a classic standard the way &lt;span style="font-style:italic;"&gt;Margaritaville&lt;/span&gt; is. Movies do it all the time. Those who read the book before a movie say things like, "Well that actually happened on three separate occasions and over two years time, not in one night like in the movie. So it really wasn't true to the book." In a book, you have 600 pages, no working budget and no time crunch. In the movie you have to get the story told as completely as possible in a couple of hours.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;In a song, you have two verses, a bridge and a chorus occupying about three minutes. You really have no time for the truth. It can be boring and awkward.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;You want the truth? You can't handle the truth!&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;Write fiction -- it is easier to swallow, it's more poetic, and it sells better.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;span style="font-style:italic;"&gt;Jon Batson&lt;br /&gt;www.jonbatson.com&lt;br /&gt;Author of The Songwriter's Hook Book at www.cdbaby.com/jonbatson3.&lt;br /&gt;* Margaritaville is © by Jimmy Buffet.&lt;/span&gt;&lt;div class="blogger-post-footer"&gt;&lt;img width='1' height='1' src='https://blogger.googleusercontent.com/tracker/8649745971845838517-6966265540076875284?l=jonssongtips.blogspot.com'/&gt;&lt;/div&gt;</content><link rel='replies' type='application/atom+xml' href='http://jonssongtips.blogspot.com/feeds/6966265540076875284/comments/default' title='Post Comments'/><link rel='replies' type='text/html' href='https://www.blogger.com/comment.g?blogID=8649745971845838517&amp;postID=6966265540076875284' title='0 Comments'/><link rel='edit' type='application/atom+xml' href='http://www.blogger.com/feeds/8649745971845838517/posts/default/6966265540076875284'/><link rel='self' type='application/atom+xml' href='http://www.blogger.com/feeds/8649745971845838517/posts/default/6966265540076875284'/><link rel='alternate' type='text/html' href='http://jonssongtips.blogspot.com/2008/04/leaving-reality-behind.html' title='Leaving reality behind.'/><author><name>tammyg</name><email>noreply@blogger.com</email><gd:extendedProperty xmlns:gd='http://schemas.google.com/g/2005' name='OpenSocialUserId' value='15686532354341681873'/></author><thr:total xmlns:thr='http://purl.org/syndication/thread/1.0'>0</thr:total></entry><entry><id>tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8649745971845838517.post-7106672030815018138</id><published>2008-04-10T11:54:00.000-04:00</published><updated>2008-04-10T11:57:14.358-04:00</updated><title type='text'>Don't write what you need to say...</title><content type='html'>Write what you need to hear.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;A wise man once told me, &lt;span style="font-style:italic;"&gt;Don't write what you want to tell someone else, write what you need to hear.&lt;/span&gt; Wise indeed.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;As writers we can too often get caught up in preaching to our audience. We know everything, it seems, and are the only source of education for our general audience. Lucky them. How did we get so wise? Do we know more about everything because we are songwriters? Hmm. Maybe not.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;Well, you can be wise, and here's how.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;Instead of figuring out what everyone needs to be told and writing that into a song, figure out what you need to hear and write that. You will be preaching to yourself and reinforcing what you need to make your life better. The audience can listen in and learn from the instruction or not, their choice. You won't be offending anyone by preaching to them or assuming they don't know something.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;When writing this song, practice writing it from different perspectives. If you write a straight-ahead This is what you need to do song, you are preaching. That's not popular with a lot of folks.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;Try writing it from another's viewpoint. I like the Wise bartender approach, where someone goes in ans states his problem and the wise bartender gives him the answer. Such songs usually have a &lt;span style="font-style:italic;"&gt;And this is what he said to me...&lt;/span&gt; chorus. I wrote one that goes:&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;span style="font-style:italic;"&gt;He said, if you keep her in diamonds and lace&lt;br /&gt;She won't care to wear the pants&lt;br /&gt;Waltz her around in an ev'ning gown&lt;br /&gt;And you can lead the dance&lt;br /&gt;Make her the queen of everything&lt;br /&gt;And you can wear the crown&lt;br /&gt;Put her so high on a pedestal&lt;br /&gt;She can't put her foot down.&lt;/span&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;I'm not singing to the audience, I'm letting them hear a conversation and take what they want from it.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;Tim McGraw has a great song called &lt;span style="font-style:italic;"&gt;Live like you were dyin'&lt;/span&gt; about a fellow who found out he had cancer. Whoosh! Heavy concept. &lt;span style="font-style:italic;"&gt;What do you do?&lt;/span&gt; he asks. The man answers to him and we get to listen in, &lt;span style="font-style:italic;"&gt;I went sky-diving, I went Rocky Mountain climbing, I went two-point-seven seconds on a bull named Fu-Manchu ... and he said, I hope someday you get the chance to live like you were dyin'.&lt;/span&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;The song tells us to not put off the important or fun things, to do them today, but a song that just said that wouldn't have been popular. This one catches you and leaves you with the message. Perhaps it's what Tim needed to hear.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;I was feeling down one day and wrote a song called &lt;span style="font-style:italic;"&gt;The Only One Saving You Now&lt;/span&gt;. It's about being cause over your situation rather than the effect, the person in charge rather than a victim. It could be construed as preachy, if it wasn't funny, but it is very tongue-in-cheek and it is not a sermon to you, it was what I needed to hear. I singing it to myself from time to time just as a reminder. Listen to 2 minutes of it at www.cdbaby.com/jonbatson1.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;In the EmmyLou Harris song, &lt;span style="font-style:italic;"&gt;A Ways to Go&lt;/span&gt;, written by Lannie Marsh, the second verse says:&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;span style="font-style:italic;"&gt;There's a junkyard dog a barkin'&lt;br /&gt;In the valley down below&lt;br /&gt;He's wanting me to stop and&lt;br /&gt;Gather up a heavy load&lt;br /&gt;Ain't gonna heed his call&lt;br /&gt;Ain't givin him the time of day&lt;br /&gt;You mangy mutt once and for all&lt;br /&gt;I said I threw that stuff away&lt;/span&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;The verse says that we are often invited to carry junk with us, yesterday's argument, last year's failed relationship and so on, a 'heavy load'. Such suggestions come from a source as low as a junkyard dog, a mutt not liking anyone and not liked by anyone. It is, again, a conversation that we get to listen in on and learn from or not. If we like, we can just hear the words and go on untouched by them.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;In Carrie Underwood's hit song, &lt;span style="font-style:italic;"&gt;Jesus Take the Wheel&lt;/span&gt;, a woman and her child are driving down the road when the woman loses control of her car just as she has lost control of her life:&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;span style="font-style:italic;"&gt;She saw both their lives flash before her eyes&lt;br /&gt;She didn't even have time to cry&lt;br /&gt;She was sooo scared&lt;br /&gt;She threw her hands up in the air&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;Jesus take the wheel&lt;br /&gt;Take it from my hands&lt;br /&gt;Cause I can't do this on my own&lt;br /&gt;I'm letting go&lt;br /&gt;So give me one more chance&lt;br /&gt;To save me from this road I'm on&lt;br /&gt;Jesus take the wheel&lt;/span&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;She is not preaching to us that we have to give over our lives to Jesus, she is telling you what that woman did. It's a very stirring song and makes a point, which you, the listener, can take or leave or enjoy vicariously.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;That's a suggestion of how to write it, but the point of this article is what to write. Write what you need to hear. Are you not getting enough done in life? Write about someone who solved that problem and how he did it. Have him tell his son or friend about it and propose the solution in the chorus.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;Kelly Fitzgerald wrote,&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;span style="font-style:italic;"&gt;I wanted this but I got that&lt;br /&gt;Someone to hold I got a cat&lt;br /&gt;I wanted rain; I got a flood&lt;br /&gt;Wished for revenge and I got blood&lt;br /&gt;I wanted peace and I got silence&lt;br /&gt;Wished for excitement; I got violence&lt;br /&gt;Sometime to kill and now I'm bored to tears&lt;br /&gt;Bring on experience you bring on the years&lt;br /&gt;I'll be careful what I wish for next time&lt;br /&gt;&lt;/span&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;It's what she needed to hear. She is making her statement and her resolution and you get to listen in. Do you have to decide to also be careful what you wish for? No, but you can if you want.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;Kenny Chesney sings about having a fight with his wife and going into a bar and asks for the good stuff when the wise bartender (yup, him again) says,&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;span style="font-style:italic;"&gt;You won't find that here&lt;br /&gt;Cause its the first long kiss on a second date&lt;br /&gt;Momma's all worried when you get home late&lt;br /&gt;Droppin' the ring in the spaghetti plate&lt;br /&gt;cause your hands are shakin so much&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;It's the way that she looks with the rice in her hair&lt;br /&gt;Eatin' burnt suppers the whole first year&lt;br /&gt;and askin' for seconds to keep her from tearin' up&lt;br /&gt;Yeah man, that's the good stuff&lt;/span&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;So try it. Figure out what you need to hear, what lesson you need to learn in your life. Write down how that would go into a song. You will be wise indeed.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;span style="font-style:italic;"&gt;Jon Batson is the author of the Songwriter's Hook Book, available at www.cdbaby.com/jonbatson3.&lt;/span&gt;&lt;div class="blogger-post-footer"&gt;&lt;img width='1' height='1' src='https://blogger.googleusercontent.com/tracker/8649745971845838517-7106672030815018138?l=jonssongtips.blogspot.com'/&gt;&lt;/div&gt;</content><link rel='replies' type='application/atom+xml' href='http://jonssongtips.blogspot.com/feeds/7106672030815018138/comments/default' title='Post Comments'/><link rel='replies' type='text/html' href='https://www.blogger.com/comment.g?blogID=8649745971845838517&amp;postID=7106672030815018138' title='0 Comments'/><link rel='edit' type='application/atom+xml' href='http://www.blogger.com/feeds/8649745971845838517/posts/default/7106672030815018138'/><link rel='self' type='application/atom+xml' href='http://www.blogger.com/feeds/8649745971845838517/posts/default/7106672030815018138'/><link rel='alternate' type='text/html' href='http://jonssongtips.blogspot.com/2008/04/dont-write-what-you-need-to-say.html' title='Don&apos;t write what you need to say...'/><author><name>tammyg</name><email>noreply@blogger.com</email><gd:extendedProperty xmlns:gd='http://schemas.google.com/g/2005' name='OpenSocialUserId' value='15686532354341681873'/></author><thr:total xmlns:thr='http://purl.org/syndication/thread/1.0'>0</thr:total></entry><entry><id>tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8649745971845838517.post-5732968934538330084</id><published>2008-04-10T11:52:00.000-04:00</published><updated>2008-04-10T11:53:16.017-04:00</updated><title type='text'>Do it again.</title><content type='html'>Have you found an awkward phrase, rhyme or rhythm? Use it again, duplicate the item in another verse to give it cadence (and credibility).&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;In a co-write, Murder in His Eyes, I needed a rhyme for "lady," so I used "Sadie" and called the lady "Saginaw Sadie," which was popular in the early 20th century where within a group, one might be called their name modified by their place of origin such as "Chicago Phil" or "Texas Jake."&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;span style="font-style:italic;"&gt;So, Joey in a pickle, was sittin' out his nickel when someone said&lt;br /&gt;Saginaw Sadie, Joey's lady was sharin' her bed&lt;/span&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;Now, just to make this stick, I used it again later in the song:&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;span style="font-style:italic;"&gt;When Joe got out he looked about for his pal Jim&lt;br /&gt;But Joey's lady, Saginaw Sadie, had left with him&lt;/span&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;Thus I gave validity to the rhyme by using it twice in the song. If people thought I was stretching things the first time they heard it, by the time they heard it again, it was familiar, therefore valid.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;In a song called Ol' Bum Toe I was writing in dialect or slang. I wrote and sang the words like someone would say them, rather than properly. I also used words like "twitch" and "twinge" and rhymed "mine" with "lying," pronounced "lyin'" (like line).&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;span style="font-style:italic;"&gt;I can tell there's a change in the weather in this Ol' Bum Toe of mine.&lt;br /&gt;When the twitch and the twinge come together I can tell the paper's lyin'&lt;br /&gt;When it says fair today and it'll be fair tomorrow without a trace of rain.&lt;br /&gt;I go lookin' for a slicker to borrow when my toe begins to pain.&lt;/span&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;OK, so now that I have established that sort of thing, how do I give it validity? Do it again. By using the colloquial "okey-doke with me" and rhyming "cryín'" (pronounced "crine") with "mine," I kept my rhyme scheme, strange as it is, intact.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;span style="font-style:italic;"&gt;It's just like when you look at me and tell me ev'rything's OK&lt;br /&gt;One look in those big sad eyes and I feel the need to say,&lt;br /&gt;It's okey-doke with me if y'never like to show if you been cryín',&lt;br /&gt;But I can tell there's a change in the weather in this Ol' Bum Toe of mine.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;/span&gt;&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;So the next time you write something that is so off the wall that you are not sure how you will get away with it, do it again. After a while what started as a risk you almost didn't take could end up to be your signature style.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;- Jon Batson&lt;div class="blogger-post-footer"&gt;&lt;img width='1' height='1' src='https://blogger.googleusercontent.com/tracker/8649745971845838517-5732968934538330084?l=jonssongtips.blogspot.com'/&gt;&lt;/div&gt;</content><link rel='replies' type='application/atom+xml' href='http://jonssongtips.blogspot.com/feeds/5732968934538330084/comments/default' title='Post Comments'/><link rel='replies' type='text/html' href='https://www.blogger.com/comment.g?blogID=8649745971845838517&amp;postID=5732968934538330084' title='0 Comments'/><link rel='edit' type='application/atom+xml' href='http://www.blogger.com/feeds/8649745971845838517/posts/default/5732968934538330084'/><link rel='self' type='application/atom+xml' href='http://www.blogger.com/feeds/8649745971845838517/posts/default/5732968934538330084'/><link rel='alternate' type='text/html' href='http://jonssongtips.blogspot.com/2008/04/do-it-again.html' title='Do it again.'/><author><name>tammyg</name><email>noreply@blogger.com</email><gd:extendedProperty xmlns:gd='http://schemas.google.com/g/2005' name='OpenSocialUserId' value='15686532354341681873'/></author><thr:total xmlns:thr='http://purl.org/syndication/thread/1.0'>0</thr:total></entry><entry><id>tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8649745971845838517.post-3413098165454510675</id><published>2008-04-10T11:37:00.000-04:00</published><updated>2008-04-10T11:38:04.170-04:00</updated><title type='text'>Familiar vs. Unique</title><content type='html'>As artists, we walk a thin line between the familiar and the unique. Write a song that's too familiar and you're old hat. Write one that is too unique and you're weird. Balance the two and you're a hit.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;A great deal has been done with just three chords. How often have we searched for the lyrics and chords to a favorite song online just to find that the song consists of C, F and G7.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;Of course, you would want to throw in what Bobby Darin called “The Drop Dead Chord.” The audience hears it and 'drops dead.' Sometime it's a “2-chord” in the middle of the bridge or chorus (in the key of C, a 2-chord is a D).&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;A standard rock ballad progression, found in “Blue Moon,” is C, Am, F, G7. You find that in many songs today. The older variation was C, Am7, Dm7, G7 - found in “Ain't Misbehavin”, “Makin' Whoopie” and “Back in Your Own Back Yard.” Using this progression could date your piece. Using it too much can put your audience to sleep.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;Try something different - again in the key of C - go to an Eb at the end of the line, throw in a relative minor, even the relative minor 7th. Steve Earl does that quite a bit. In the key of C, you have C, F and G7. Then add the second - D - and relative minors - Am, Em and Dm - sometimes using the 7th on the minors. Now you have seven chords for your song and it might take the melody in places you hadn't considered.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;On the other hand, if you were to use chords that had never worked for that key, a different chord each time you changed chords with none repeated, you would be innovative and original but no one would understand you. The song could not be followed. I'd like to site a famous example, but there are none. The closest I could come would be to point out that a classical composer named Bela Bartok was famous for his discordant and avant guard work, you rarely hear it played, used in elevators or in the movies. He was too avant guard for the broad public.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;Now consider the melody: suppose you used the tune to “Blue Moon” for every song you wrote. Each time you started a song, it would be the same melody. Naturally, your audience would soon be groaning and asking for their hats. There have been songs with one or two notes in the melody, but they weren't overly popular - even the “One Note Samba” had an intricate and exciting chord pattern to play against.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;On the other hand, taking the melody for a Country song from Grand Opera would be 'unreal' to the audience. They would wonder where you came from and would ask you to go back. The same thing if you took a Country piece and sang it on the operatic stage. It is just too foreign for that audience.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;This would interpret to style as well. I recall an audition in New York City in which a young man stood up with a beat up guitar, a harmonica on a clip-holder and a flat, mis-western twang. He began singing a song that appeared to go on verse after verse after verse, rambling without direction, in a lackluster manner. The producer stopped the man with one phrase: “We've already got a Bob Dylan.” If he had swung from the chandelier while playing the lute he would have been a bit too far out, but as it was he was too familiar.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;I have several songs that I feel are brilliant in their language and concept, fulfilling the promise in grand style and well-thought-out poetry that should live for centuries. However, nobody gets those songs, so I don't sing them, I just quietly chuckle to myself from time to time.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;And that is what you will have to do: Write your terribly esoteric song that no one will get and sing it to yourself from time to time, marveling at your genius - but don't sing it to the public at large, they won't get it. Or write your three-chord clone of “Your Cheatin' Heart” and imagine that you are giving Hank Williams a run for his money in the song charts. But singing a song thus dated will not get you a popular following.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;When you're done with your song, sing it over. Is it too familiar? If so, change the melody or the chords or throw another line into the chorus - make it unique somehow. Is your song perfect, but no one gets it? You might be a bit too far out there - trying reeling it back in a notch or two, make your song more familiar.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;When you achieve that perfect balance, familiar enough so people smile and are comfortable with the song, yet unique enough to catch someone's ear and make them start tapping and singing along, then you will have a song that will make them sit up and take notice at the open mics. Who knows, you might even have a hit.&lt;br /&gt;&lt;br /&gt;- Jon Batson&lt;div class="blogger-post-footer"&gt;&lt;img width='1' height='1' src='https://blogger.googleusercontent.com/tracker/8649745971845838517-3413098165454510675?l=jonssongtips.blogspot.com'/&gt;&lt;/div&gt;</content><link rel='replies' type='application/atom+xml' href='http://jonssongtips.blogspot.com/feeds/3413098165454510675/comments/default' title='Post Comments'/><link rel='replies' type='text/html' href='https://www.blogger.com/comment.g?blogID=8649745971845838517&amp;postID=3413098165454510675' title='0 Comments'/><link rel='edit' type='application/atom+xml' href='http://www.blogger.com/feeds/8649745971845838517/posts/default/3413098165454510675'/><link rel='self' type='application/atom+xml' href='http://www.blogger.com/feeds/8649745971845838517/posts/default/3413098165454510675'/><link rel='alternate' type='text/html' href='http://jonssongtips.blogspot.com/2008/04/familiar-vs-unique.html' title='Familiar vs. Unique'/><author><name>tammyg</name><email>noreply@blogger.com</email><gd:extendedProperty xmlns:gd='http://schemas.google.com/g/2005' name='OpenSocialUserId' value='15686532354341681873'/></author><thr:total xmlns:thr='http://purl.org/syndication/thread/1.0'>0</thr:total></entry></feed>